Some people say that protecting the environment governments responsibility. Other believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Opinions are often divided on whether some
individual
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say that protecting the
environment
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is
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government
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responsibility.
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,
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believe that every human should be responsible for it. Both opinions will be analyzed in
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essay before a reasoned conclusion is drawn. On the one hand, many proponents argue that protecting the
environment
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government
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responsibility. As
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government
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can take serious action against it
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as restricting
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of plastic and
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cleaners for roads.
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, in
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the cleaners for
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roads and
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basket trucks which comes frequently for
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the garbage baskets. In
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case, it is obvious why many feel certain that protecting the
environment
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is
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the government
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government
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responsibility.
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, the advocates of the
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view counter
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argument by citing that every human should be responsible for protecting the
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.People who typically share
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point of view usually defend it by arguing that humans should limit their access
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personal cars.As car is
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a major issue of pollution which makes the
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worse.
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, in European countries,
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use
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and public transportation for travel and
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environment
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the environment
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of those countries
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also
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clean.
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, it is understandable why
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point of view has garnered support. After looking at both the arguments of those in support of that
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is responsible for protecting
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environment
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and those in opposition, it can be concluded that
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, it is considered that both play an important role in protecting the
environment
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.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve your introduction to clearly present both sides of the argument and prepare the reader for the discussion. For example, you could mention the need for shared responsibility in the opening.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that you include a clear conclusion that synthesizes the main points discussed and clearly presents your opinion.
Task Achievement
Expand on your examples to make them more specific and relevant. This will help support your points more effectively and improve the task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on avoiding repetition in your writing and aim for varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both perspectives on environmental responsibility.
Task Achievement
The use of examples, such as Kuwait's cleanliness measures and European transportation habits, adds depth to the discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical transitions between ideas help maintain the flow of the essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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