some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste

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Some groups think
recycle
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activities are not successful in
structures
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, and their opinion is new rules are
necassery
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necessary
to solve
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issue. I completely agree
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it.
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, nowadays humanity has a waste problem and many governments announced new laws about
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trouble. The money punishment is clearly
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on
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it. When citizens waste
to
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their
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sources
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, they face
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really hard
money
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punishments.
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,
this
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stuition
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situation
makes
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more creative because they use their trash to make new tools. İnitially, they make
pupets
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puppets
with socks, so the public education level is increasing.
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, economic laws work
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the public.
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,
other
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technic is
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technique
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could be with cash again. When society
use
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technologic recycle
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technological recycling
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trash, the
machiene
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machine
could give some cash to people.
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, Germany uses
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method for
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. Not only
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Germany
,
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but
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İtaly is using that for the public,
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one survey shows cities'
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rate fell down in Germany and İtaly.
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, punishment is not
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way. Sometimes awards can solve some troubles. In conclusion, Many people think new requirements have really significant roles
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recycling. My idea is
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side with these people. Economic laws (money punishment,
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cash awards) can fix many
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task response
Your introduction provides a clear position on the topic, but expanding on your viewpoints with more depth could improve clarity and engagement. Try to outline your main points briefly in the introduction to give a roadmap for your essay.
task response
The supporting arguments need more elaboration. Connect your examples to broader points, ensuring each paragraph effectively supports your thesis. Consider discussing the cons of not implementing laws or potential challenges with enforcement.
coherence cohesion
The essay would benefit from a clearer organization. Transition words and phrases can help guide the reader through your argument more smoothly. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly summarize your main points and thesis. Strengthening the links between these sections could enhance the overall coherence of your argument.
task response
You presented a unique view on how financial incentives can encourage recycling, which adds depth to your response.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion clearly restates your position, which is essential to a coherent essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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