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The map show the village of Stokeford and in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map show the village of Stokeford and in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the
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 that occurred in the town of Stokeford from 1930 to 2010.
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, it is evident that dramatic changes, with the
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 of retirement homes and many residences and the removal of shops and
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farmland. At the beginning of the period, the farmland was located in
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most areas, and the gardens could be seen in
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Stokeford. Over the period, a lot of residences were located along the new roads, and the large houses were replaced
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the
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retirement homes.
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 the post office, the river stoke and the bridge remained in their place, the shops were removed.
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,
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 of the primary school was
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bigger than in the past.
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upward
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 trend in the number of students. In conclusion, Stokeford underwent a significant transformation over the period, with notable changes including
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 primary school, many houses, and
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retirement homes.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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