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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should The Relationship Between Age and Crime, last year Types of Property Crime in the UK, last year
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The line graph above illustrates the relation between various ranges of age and their rates for
crime
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 in the United Kingdom.
Whereas
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, the pie chart presents the
number
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 for four different types of
crime
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.
Overall
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, the graph shows that people aged between 16 to 24 were the most likely to commit a
crime
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 in the
last
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 year.
On the other hand
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, the most common type of
crime
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 is violent
crime
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. To start with, those aged around 0 to 8 were unlikely to commit any
crimes
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. The line graph started to show rapid growth at 12 years old
,
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 and reached its peak at 20 years old at around 80 thousand
crimes
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.
Then
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, the trend for
crime
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 rates has declined in the older age. People in the UK with ages above 48
detained
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are detained
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a
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number
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 of
crimes
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 below 10 thousand. In terms of their types of
crime
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, most criminals in the UK were not interested in public order
crimes
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, making it the lowest
number
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 at approximately 9 per
cent
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. The highest
number
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 of
crimes
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 goes to violent
crimes
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 at 46 per
cent
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. Followed by property-related
crimes
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 at 23 per
cent
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.
Then
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, the third place was held by those who committed a
crime
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 related to drugs at 22 per
cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, number, crimes, cent with synonyms.
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