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The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.

The line graph illustrates the amount of visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries over a period of eighteen years between 1996 and 2014.
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The graph depicts the number of
visitor
Change to a plural noun
visitors
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spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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for
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apply
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touring
to
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apply
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New Zealand between 5 countries; Australia,
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Japan and China from 1996 to 2014, measured in New Zealand
dollar
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dollars
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.
Overall
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, Australia had held the highest spot over
period
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the period
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while
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 China was lowest. Interestingly, the figures show fluctuations.
To begin
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 with, the majority of
visitors
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visitors'
visitor's
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spend money on
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spending in
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 Australia increased rapidly until 2007
then
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, decreased significantly in 2008, after
that
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apply
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the figure

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • visitor spend
  • over a period of
  • eighteen years
  • between 1996 and 2014
  • general trend
  • observed
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuations
  • a breakdown of
  • spending habits
  • comparison
  • highest spenders
  • lowest spenders
  • possible reasons
  • economic conditions
  • tourism promotions
  • significant events
  • specific significant peaks
  • drops in spending
  • corresponding years
  • impact of external factors
  • global financial crisis
  • natural disasters
  • summarizing
  • overall trend
  • implications
  • tourism industry
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