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Band 5.5

Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read news in the newspaper and watch news programs on television . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 believe that the
news
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 from newspapers or television is useless, they think it is a waste of time and has no relation to them. I personally disagree with
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 statement because the
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 can teach us a lot of lessons and some opportunities in the
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,
people
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 can learn from past events that were aired on television.
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, the
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 about =traffic accidents.
People
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 can study the cause of the accidents and try to prevent them for their own
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 has
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 purpose as a research paper which is giving some knowledge to the
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, the newspaper usually publishes some important events that happen in the
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. It will inform
people
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 to attend the events or at least know about them.
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, there are a lot of job opportunities posted in the newspaper.
People
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 who are currently looking for a new job can find them in the newspaper.
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 means that it can give us both information from the past and to the
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. In summary, there are some reasons why
people
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 should keep reading or watching the
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such
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 as to expand their knowledge and predict the
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. I believe the
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 is still relevant to
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people
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's conditions nowadays.
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task achievement
Ensure that all ideas presented in the essay are fully developed and supported with examples where necessary.
coherence cohesion
Consider enhancing the logical flow between arguments and examples for a smoother reading experience.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and a well-summarized conclusion, providing clarity to the reader.
task achievement
Strong examples are used to illustrate points, such as those related to traffic accidents and job opportunities.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • informed
  • current events
  • platform
  • discussion
  • engagement
  • informed decisions
  • diversity
  • sense of community
  • biased
  • sensationalized
  • overwhelming
  • stressful
  • consumption
  • balanced
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