In some countries criminal trials in law courts are shown on television so that the general public can watch. Do the advantages of allowing this overweigh the disadvantages?

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are watched by the population in some regions.
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it may lead to issues
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as mental health problems
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prisoners, seeing these criminals on
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TV may prevent more disasters. So, I believe that
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outweigh
the drawbacks. On the one hand, in many
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people are not afraid to commit crimes because of their belief that they will not be punished.
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helps to really make them understand the consequences of their actions.
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, in the case of
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where most crimes are not even considered a problem leads to more problemed
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. If the guilty ones and
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punishment can be seen by the public, it is more likely for people to feel scared to commit
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actions.
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, to what
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is ethical, is arguable. The ones who are guilty will suffer in
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prisons
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. Is it really necessary that they will be all watched by
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society
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will cause
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damage to their mental health.
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, a prisoner who robbed a bank
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the reason of poverty got their lesson by staying in a closed place for several years.
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their faces and reason
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crime
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publicly
will cause them nothing but harm. In conclusion, even though publicly watching crimes has drawbacks
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me it comes with great benefits.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This will help strengthen your points and make them more convincing.
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While you touched on both advantages and disadvantages, try to explore them in more detail. A detailed exploration will make your argument more comprehensive.
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Your essay includes an introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument well.
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You pose an interesting argument about the societal impact of broadcasting criminal trials on television, which engages the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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