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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The diagram shows the two potential locations for the planned supermarket in the
town
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 of
Garlsdon
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. It is clear from the map that site1
locates
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is located
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at
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in
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 the
suburb
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 areas,
whereas
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 site2 is chosen to be placed
at
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in
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 the
town
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 centre. Looking into more details,
site2
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site 2
, the
site
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 within the city area, is surrounded by the main residential area of the
town
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, allowing
town
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 residents to access it from roughly equal distances.
In contrast
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,
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the site1
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site1
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site
 is expected to
locate
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be located
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at
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in
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 the northwest part of
Garlsdon
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, in the countryside, closer to the northwest corner of the housing region. In terms of transportation, both locations are situated close to the railway which passes through the
town
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 from its northwest to its southeast.
Site1
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Site 1
 is closer to the main road towards Hindon, a place with 55000 less population than
Garlsdon
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. Site2 enables more options in terms of highway choices, allowing access not only to Hindon
,
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apply
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 but
also
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two
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to two
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 relatively larger
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town
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towns
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 Bransdin and Cransdon, at around 16km and 25km away from
Garlsdon
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 respectively. The only drawback for
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the site2
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site2
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site 2
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is attributes
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attributes
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attributed
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 to the absence of traffic in
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town
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the town
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 centre.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, garlsdon, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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