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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both viewpoints and then give your opinion.

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In recent years, we have faced numerous problems
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environments
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environment
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. Many scientists are saying that we are not able to make it back if we don't act right now. Some people agree
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 opinion.
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, some people still think we can overcome global warming through national movements. I'm going to discuss both views and I'll give my opinion. On one hand, there are individuals
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 is negative. There are several reasons why they think in
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 way.
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, we've been working on environmental issues for decades but
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tempuratures
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temperatures
 are going up.
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 problem includes carbon emissions from developing countries. And
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, human activities on
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 planet are irreversible.
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, some species are already extinct which are lost forever, and certain ecosystems have been altered
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 urbanization and deforestation.
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, we still have positive opinions. Thanks to fast innovations
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 technology, we can make electricity from sunlight. And studies to make
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biofuels
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 are ongoing.
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 means human impact can be mitigated and potentially reversed through targeted conservation efforts and sustainable practices.
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 includes reforestation, wildlife protection laws, and the establishment of more protected areas. In my opinion, I think there are chances to flip
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 situation. Many scientists are working on their projects to solve weather issues. Technological advancements and increased awareness are
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 seen as catalysts for change. Innovations in sustainable agriculture, renewable energy, and waste management offer ways to reduce our footprint and restore ecological balance.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next to maintain flow.
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Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
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Expand on your opinion in the conclusion to give more depth to your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames the discussion well.
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The writer presents both viewpoints effectively and maintains a balanced discussion.
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Positive use of advanced vocabulary and sentence structures were observed throughout the essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • habitat destruction
  • species extinction
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • ecosystem
  • environmental preservation
  • economic imperatives
  • population growth
  • conservation efforts
  • sustainable practices
  • reforestation
  • wildlife protection laws
  • protected areas
  • technological advancements
  • sustainable agriculture
  • renewable energy
  • waste management
  • ecological balance
  • global cooperation
  • environmental education
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