The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The line chart above provides information on why people move to the capital city.
Overall
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, the reasons for their movement include employment, study, family/ friends, and
adventure
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. Employment was the highest cause
while
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adventure
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was the least. The number of people
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who change
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change
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changed
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where they
live
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lived
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for employment in the year 2000 was 60.000
then
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it reached
the
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a
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peak in 2010 with approximately 90.000
then
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it fell to about 89,000 in 2015. The second highest cause was
eduaction
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education
where 10,000 moved in 2000
then
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the number raised to almost 50.000 in 2005 and 55.000 in 2010.
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it witnessed a dramatic increase to 89.000 in 2015.
On the other hand
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, the least two reasons behind going to the capital
was
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were
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family/friends and
adventure
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. The number of both was 10.000 in 2000
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family/friends grew to reach the peak in 2015 with just above 20.000.
Adventure
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however
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, had a slow increase in 2005, 2010, and 2015 starting with around 11.000
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13.000
finally
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about 15.000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adventure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • relocation motivations
  • employment opportunities
  • educational reasons
  • family reunification
  • cultural pursuits
  • trend analysis
  • data patterns
  • anomalies
  • fluctuations
  • consistent growth
  • declining factors
  • external influences
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