The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The line chart above provides information on why people move to the capital city.
Overall
, the reasons for their movement include employment, study, family/ friends, and Linking Words
adventure
. Employment was the highest cause Use synonyms
while
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adventure
was the least.
The number of people Use synonyms
Correct pronoun usage
who change
change
where they Wrong verb form
changed
live
for employment in the year 2000 was 60.000 Wrong verb form
lived
then
it reached Linking Words
the
peak in 2010 with approximately 90.000 Correct article usage
a
then
it fell to about 89,000 in 2015. The second highest cause was Linking Words
eduaction
where 10,000 moved in 2000 Correct your spelling
education
then
the number raised to almost 50.000 in 2005 and 55.000 in 2010. Linking Words
Then
it witnessed a dramatic increase to 89.000 in 2015.
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On the other hand
, the least two reasons behind going to the capital Linking Words
was
family/friends and Change the verb form
were
adventure
. The number of both was 10.000 in 2000 Use synonyms
then
family/friends grew to reach the peak in 2015 with just above 20.000. Linking Words
Adventure
Use synonyms
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however
, had a slow increase in 2005, 2010, and 2015 starting with around 11.000 Add the comma(s)
, however
then
13.000 Linking Words
finally
about 15.000.Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adventure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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