The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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Those two graphs illustrate the employment situation of students who graduated from one university with an anthropology degree. The pie chart presents the distribution of employment destinations
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the table demonstrates the income level of
people
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working in three different environments. First of all,
people
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who are working full-time account for 52% of the employment destination, which is the largest category compared with the other five. Interestingly, even though the proportion of
people
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who are taking both part-time work and postgraduate study only accounts for 5%, the sum of the graduates who are involved in a master's degree occupies 20% of the whole population.
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, the number of unemployed graduates is 4% higher than those who only have a part-time job. With five years of working experience, 50% of the government sector are more likely to earn a salary of more than $100,000,
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, only 40% of freelance consultants and 30% of private companies can access the same payment level.
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, for the income range between $25,000 - $49,999 and $50,000 - 74,999, both freelance consultants and the government sector demonstrate the same data, which are 5% and 15% respectively.
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, 35% of
people
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employed by private companies gain income of $50,000 - 74,999.
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