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The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The bar chart illustrates how many
houses
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ware
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were
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 initiating in two different cities, from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there
ware
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were
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 more
houses
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 built in
Derby
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 than in Nottingham for
the
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most of the period
gavin
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. In terms of the
number
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 of
houses
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 built,
Derby
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 started at almost 50
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house
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houses
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 in 2000.
this
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remain
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un changed
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unchanged
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 in the next year. After that the
number
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 of
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house
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houses
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 had a considerable increase at about 100
houses
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ware
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were
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 built in
Derby
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 city.
Althgh
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Although
 it remain steady for the next four
year
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years
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, it reach a peak of around 350
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house
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houses
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 in 2009. The
number
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 of
houses
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 in Nottingham began at 50
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house
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houses
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 in 2000,
then
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 it rose slightly to 50
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house
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houses
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 in 2001,
afetr
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after
 that it dropped to under 50 in 2002, but it returned to growth to
at
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under 100
houses
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,
befor
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before
 it dropped again to less than 50
houses
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. in 2007 the
number
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 of
houses
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 in Nottingham increased to
excced
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exceed
 the
number
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 of
houses
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 in
Derby
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 city to about 200
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house
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houses
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.
However
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 it
dramaticly
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dramatically
 decreased to under 50
houses
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 in 2008, but
then
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sharbly
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sharply
 rose to about 250
houses
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, derby, number, house with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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