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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the ground floor of a library in 2001 and after it was renovated in 2009.
Overall
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, there are several additions
on
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 the number of
rooms
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 after it was reconstructed.
However
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, the layout seems similar to the one before, except
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 the size of most
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 there.
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, the most obvious differences were the increased number of
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rooms
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 on the left
side
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 from only the Self-help and History
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 divided into six
rooms
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, which are Fiction, Kitchen, Economics, Law, and the first two
rooms
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 mentioned. The
tables
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 positions
also
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 turned bigger and simpler, it was changed from eight tables into just four desks with
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 wider size. On the right
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 of the maps, we can see the Newspaper & Periodicals
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 changed into Films & DVDs. Next to it, there were two new computers added
side
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 by
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. The
last
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changes
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were
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 the emergence of
Children's
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the Children's
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 area behind the tables.
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state and support the main features throughout the essay. Currently, some comparisons are not entirely clear or fully developed. Adding more specific details and examples could enhance the task achievement and clarity of your response.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay to improve the logical flow of ideas. Consider following a more structured approach by separating different sections of the map for better clarity. For example, discuss changes on one side of the map before moving to the other, ensuring smoother transitions between points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas and sentences more effectively, which will improve the overall cohesion.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction is concise and effectively sets the context for the comparison. This clearly outlines what readers can expect in the essay, making it a good example of a solid introduction.
complete response
You successfully identified and described the key differences between the plans in 2001 and 2009. This demonstrates a good understanding of the task's requirements.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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