The best way to reduce emissions from vehicles is to impose a higer tax on vehicles which use a lot of fuel and lower tax on those that don't. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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discards is to impose a higher tax on several
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a lot of fuel and
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vehicle
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a lot of fuel. I agree
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that idea because
vehicles
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that
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a lot of fuel usually are
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older and produce more pollution than the newer
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. The concept of green living nowadays has more impact
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people
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. The unpredictable weather changes between
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has become more real and
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's awareness immediately. In modern living,
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get used to
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side by side daily with
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machine
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vehicle
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of
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. We prefer to
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modern transportation and own even more than
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kind of
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such
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and
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car. Governments should interfere in
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the impact of
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vehicle
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to
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quality
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air
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. If the older
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higher rates,
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will coordinate and rethinking not to change into the newer
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the idea of higher tax is
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consuments
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to buy a newer
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need to be encouraged to provide and sell modern
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green living. Not only using electric cars and
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hybrid
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type of solution to diminish the air pollution in the world.

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Ensure that your essay directly addresses all parts of the task. While the essay presents arguments in favor of higher taxes for older vehicles, it could benefit from a direct exploration of any potential negative effects or counterarguments related to this approach.
coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more clearly to improve the logical flow of the essay. Each paragraph should focus on a single main point and transition smoothly to the next.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the introduction and conclusion by summarizing key points and clearly stating your position. The current conclusion could be more assertive about your perspective.
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Use more specific examples or evidence to support your points. For instance, providing data or specific cases about vehicle emissions statistics could strengthen the essay.
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The essay demonstrates a clear stance, supporting the idea of varying taxes based on vehicle fuel usage and pollution contribution.
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Main arguments are supported with some reasoning, such as the environmental impact of older vehicles compared to newer models.
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The essay indicates awareness of broader environmental issues, emphasizing the concept of 'green living'.
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Uses some varied vocabulary, such as 'green living', 'unpredictable weather changes', and 'hybrid vehicles'.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions reduction
  • fuel-efficient vehicles
  • incentivize
  • consumer preferences
  • green vehicles
  • economic impact
  • low-income individuals
  • subsidies
  • supportive measures
  • equity
  • alternative measures
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • infrastructure
  • electric vehicles
  • vehicle manufacturing
  • innovations
  • hybrid vehicles
  • environmental benefits
  • carbon footprint
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