Some people say that online courses are the most beneficial, while others believe traditional classrooms are more advantageous. Discuss both views and give opinions.

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some people think that online
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offer some benefits, others believe that traditional classrooms have some more advantages. Online
courses
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have more options nowadays
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of the traditional
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. Young people are more likely to choose online
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because it is more flexible in times and places. You can easily have your
courses
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everywhere, in your home or simply in the cafe, where you can learn and enjoy your leisure time. Busier people tend to choose online
courses
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because they can skip the travel time from home to the course’s place, it is more time efficient.
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the traditional classrooms give some serious feeling inside the class and make it more interesting. Live interaction between
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students
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and
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sometimes gives more motivation and offers more experience.
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I like to learn in traditional classrooms, as I grow older and get busier, I prefer to take online
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. As in my experience, I took three yoga offline classes but I ended up only showing up for one class
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the heavy traffic and rainstorms.
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I lost the two classes and
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to pay more. I still need to check the weather and prepare the transportation on the day I book the
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. In conclusion, nowadays online
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can give you a similar experience
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the traditional one, with the help of enhanced technology. There are many applications and
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courses
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options to learn online through the internet and we can choose what we like the most and suitable
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schedule.
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supporting evidence
Ensure that each main point is supported with relevant evidence and more detailed examples. While the essay provides some personal experience, it can improve by integrating broader evidence or statistics to strengthen the argument.
coherence
Enhance the coherence by using more linking devices and transitions between ideas. This will help guide the reader more smoothly from one paragraph to the next.
introduction conclusion
While the essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, make sure they address the essay’s task directly and concisely. You can improve by stating both views in the introduction and summarizing them effectively in the conclusion.
balanced view
The essay presents a balanced discussion of both online courses and traditional classrooms.
personal example
Offers personal experience to support opinion and adds a personal touch to the analysis.
task completion
The essay covers the task effectively by discussing both viewpoints, which means the main task is addressed well.

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