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The given charts show the main sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons.

The given charts show the main sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. where relevant. Write a report for a university lecturer reporting the main features and making comparisons.
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The two pie charts give information about different
sourses
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sources
 of
energy
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 in the United States of America in the years 1980 and 1990. Units are
masured
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measured
 by percentage.
overall
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,
it is clear that
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 oil and
netural
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natural
 gas were the most
countirbuted
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contributed
 sources of
energy
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 in the USA all over the period.
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Also
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Also,
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 we can
notist
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note
 that hydroelectric power was not changing at all. At the
beganing
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beginning
 of the period, coal was 22% in 1980, but it increased to 27% by 1990.
Likewise
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,
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the neuclear
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neuclear
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nuclear
 power sector
countributed
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contributed
for
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to
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 5% of the
energy
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 sources in the United States,
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then
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and then
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 it rose by half to reach 10% in 1990. hydroelectric remains
steadly
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steadily
steady
 unchanged at 5%.
On the other hand
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,
although
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, oil and natural gas
represent
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represented
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 the most sources
for
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of
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energy
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to
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in
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 the USA in 1980,
it
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they
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 had
considerable
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a considerable
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 decline at 33% and 25% respectively in 1990.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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