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Band 3.5

Government around the world should be responsible for providing a free edutacion to all of its citizens. Do you agree or disagree?

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The government should provide education to all the citizens. I agree with
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apply good politics and it is hard for the people. Anyway, they should help, providing tools, books, food, and
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 very well at school you have a lot of chances to be successful in your life, why it is so important to get a good culture. There are so many homeless, who could not have a chance to study because they did not have enough money. In conclusion, The government has to give a free scholarship and pay for it. No more homeless, no more Problems. The kids will have a good education, they will be able to get a university degree and a good life.

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coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which is a good structure. However, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and link them logically across the essay.
task achievement
The essay partly addresses the task by giving a general argument about the benefits of free education. However, you can enhance this by providing more specific reasons and examples.
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Work on providing clearer examples or evidence that supports your stance. For instance, cite specific situations or countries where free education has been impactful.
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You provide a direct response to the task, stating your position clearly.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a structured introduction and conclusion, giving a complete response to the prompt.
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You provide a positive perspective on how free education can improve individual success, which is a good central idea.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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