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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think is the case? is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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Nowadays, most
people
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 like to wear modern and fashionable
dresses
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. Wearing trendy
clothes
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 not only boosts
self confidence
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 but
it
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also
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 improves productive work. Some
people
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 feel that good
clothes
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 are a form of showing their status of wealth. Wearing stunning attire is not a bad habit until it affects another person's feelings or
emotion
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss why most
people
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 like to wear fashionable
clothes
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 and how it can benefit society. From
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the stone
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stone age
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Stone Age
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 to
modern
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the modern
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era
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era,
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dresses
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play
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 a significant role in part of evolution. During the ancient
period
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period,
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people
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 used to wear
clothes
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 made of cotton
and
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which were handmade but today with modern technological advancements different materials and styles of
dresses
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 are introduced in the textile industry. Most
people
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 think that attire is a form of status symbol. They want to show off their wealth through
clothes
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. It not only improves their look but
also
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self
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their
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 confidence.
For
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example
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example,
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 most
people
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 wear formal
good looking
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dresses
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 in interviews which creates a positive impression
in
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at
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 first look. For different occasions
people
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 wear different
dresses
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 to show their mood
for instance
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 black
dresses
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 are used in funerals and attractive colors are worn in marriages.
In
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particular
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particular,
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 wearing trendy
clothes
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 makes
people
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to
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apply
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feel good and smart. In today's
world
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world,
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 our attire is crucial for personality judgement. Wearing clean and neat
dresses
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 not only influences another person but
it
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also
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 creates a
well mannered
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well-mannered
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 society. Sometimes
dresses
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 reflect our emotions so wearing fashionable
clothes
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 improves our mood. Even though dressing well is a good habit
but
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it should not affect underprivileged or poor
people
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's
emotion
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emotions
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. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 wearing fashionable
clothes
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 is a good habit until it affects other's emotions. Trendy
clothes
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 boost our
self confidence
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self-confidence
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 and
improves
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improve
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 our mood. So every
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people
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person
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 should wear neat and clean
clothes
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 to create a better first impression.

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task achievement
Ensure all your points are fully developed and supported. Try to connect your ideas more explicitly to the thesis statement throughout the essay to maintain focus.
coherence cohesion
Increase the use of linking words or phrases to enhance the flow of the essay, creating smoother transitions between ideas.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly states the topic and the writer's perspective, setting a clear direction for the essay.
logical structure
The essay presents a logical structure with relevant examples, enhancing the reader's understanding of the arguments.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • express individuality
  • boost confidence
  • self-esteem
  • social status
  • designer labels
  • cultural icons
  • art and creativity
  • financial strain
  • overspend
  • fast fashion
  • culture of waste
  • economic growth
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