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The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
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The provided bar chart reports the data about the proportion of individuals in
British
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 Republic who donated to charity based on their
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 for two years 1990 and 2010 respectively. Generally, in 1990 the highest amount of donations was conducted by the middle
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 between 36-50 which reached more than 40%.
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 the lowest in the same year was observed for the youngest
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 at18-25 which exhibited almost 15% only.
On the other hand
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, in 2010 Britain showed a significant donation rate of nearly 39% at older
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 51-65.
In contrast
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, only 5% of the money was given to charity in the first category of
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 between 18-25. We can note that
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 the two categories in the middle 36-35 and 51-65 in both years were the highest giving rate in comparison to other
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 groups.
In addition
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, there was no specific pattern between
ages
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 and granting proportion in the two given years.
However
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, in the first three groups, the granting rate increased as the
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 increased in 1990 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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