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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The charts show data on the area and types of
dance
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classes
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 for young communities in a city
of
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in
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 Australia that are currently attending. The
place
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 for
dance
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 communities is at private studios, and ballet become the most popular class for under 11
age
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,
as well as
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 modern
dance
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 for 11 – 16
age
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 communities. The areas for
classes
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 of
dance
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 chosen by young
age
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 are divided into 4 places. Private studios become
favourite
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a favourite
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place
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 for young
groups
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 (48%). Around a fourth of young people choose school halls for after-school
classes
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. And for the third
place
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, pupils choose community halls and others (18%). And the percentage of college
based
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 around one-tenth. Kind of
dance
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classes
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 are divided into 2 types, under 11 and between 11 and 16. Ballet has the first
place
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 chosen by under 11
groups
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 (600
students
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) and for the 11 - 16
groups
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 modern
dance
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 became very popular, and is chosen by more than 500 pupils. Around 450 under 11
students
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 attend tap
dance
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, and more than 400
students
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 in
groups
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 11 – 16
this
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 type of
dance
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.
And about
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About
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 300 numbers of pupils under 11
age
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 choose modern
dance
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, and with the same numbers,
students
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 attend ballet
classes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, place, age, groups, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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