The bar chart shows the average number of hours per week that men and women spend doing activities around the home.

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The diagram illustrates the average number of
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per
week
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that both genders spend doing activities around the home. As an overview, the highest average number of
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per
week
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that
men
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spent was watching television
whereas
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women
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wasted their time by cooking. In surfing the internet, watching the television, and gardening,
men
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were the highest at that
whereas
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cooking
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in cooking
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, cleaning the house, washing up, and reading,
women
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were the highest at that. In surfing the internet,
men
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wasted 13
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per
week
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whereas
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women
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only spent 4
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per
week
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on that.
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, in cleaning the house,
women
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were the highest at that, as they wasted 5
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whereas
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men
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only spent 2
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per
week
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on that.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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