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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures compare the development of Lywnwhich School between 2006 and now.
Overall
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, there are a lot of new
facility
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facilities
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 for
student
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students
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 in
the
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recent times compared to 2006.
To begin
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 with, there
were
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 a large car park which connected to the main road
in
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at
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 the top of
east
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the east
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 maps
whereas
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library
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the library
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 and tree
was
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were
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 behind
this
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 facility.
This
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followed
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is followed
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 by two
path
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paths
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 which connected to
college
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 building 1 in the south sites
as well as
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college
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 building 2 in the west sites.
Moreover
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, there was a huge
sports
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 field in
east
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the east
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 corner of
pictures
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the pictures
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 which was next to the
library
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also
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 trees. It is worthwhile to note that the trees still dominated these
school
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schools
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. On top of that, there are a lot of
transformation
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transformations
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in
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at
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the
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apply
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Lynwhich
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college
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College
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.
Firstly
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, the management teams of
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college
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the college
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 decided to deforestation areas in
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the south-west
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south-west
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southwest
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then
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and then
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 relocated
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library
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the library
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 to
this
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 location. After that, they began
constructed
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to construct
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sports
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a sports
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 centre in the
origins
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original
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library
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 building
also
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 it made
sports
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field
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fields
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became
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apply
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smaller sizes.
Furthermore
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, the pick-up places for parents
splitted
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split
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to
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into
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 two
function
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functions
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 which can used for cars and bikes,
hence
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, it showed that the school organizations encouraged students to
used
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use
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environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly
vehicle
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vehicles
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 even though they were
cutting-off
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cutting off
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 the trees.
Besides
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 that, there is a new
cafetaria
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cafeteria
 in the middle of
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the maps
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maps
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map
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 which
connected
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is connected
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 with the walking track to a new bus stop, classroom, parking building, and
sports
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 centre.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, college, sports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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