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Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

A few people think that recent environmental
problems
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such
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 as global warming,
pollution
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 and deforestation are world
problems
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 and should be dealt with
the
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by the
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government
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.
on the other hand
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, some believe that these issues can only be managed by individuals. I think, to face global
problems
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 we need both
government
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as well as
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this
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 essay, I will discuss both perspectives and give my opinion. Nowadays, we are facing many global
problems
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such
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 as deforestation, climatic change,
pollution
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 and increased population.
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,
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government
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the government
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 has
significant
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a significant
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 role in tackling these issues.
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, Many developed countries
making
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 a law of tree plantation behind the house before construction.
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 to that, biodegradable bags are slowly
introduced
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being introduced
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 in shopping to prevent the use of plastics
there by
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thereby
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, reducing land
pollution
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. In countries like
china
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China
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 and
india
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India
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, family planning scheme is initiated to control overpopulation. In
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method
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method,
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 1 child is allowed for couples and it can indirectly solve climatic changes. At the same time, individuals should
co-operate
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cooperate
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 with
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government
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the government
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for
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 successfully
battling
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battle
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 these global
problems
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.
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, using public transport
instead
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 of private cars can significantly reduce
the
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apply
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carbon dioxide
emission
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emissions
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.
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 to that, replacing plastics with
diodegradable
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biodegradable
 materials
lower
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 land and water
pollution
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. To change
the
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society, we need to change our daily habits of not harming
environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion,
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government
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governments
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 and individuals should work hand in hand to face global
problems
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such
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 as
pollution
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 control and carbon dioxide emission. When
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government
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the government
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 implements a law, as a citizen we should follow it. By changing ourselves, we can
prevent
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protect
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 the environment.

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Task Response
To enhance your task response, make sure to elaborate more on examples and how they specifically address both government and individual roles.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on making your main points more explicit and elaborated, so your essay structure becomes even clearer.
Task Response
Your response thoroughly addresses the task prompt, discussing both perspectives and providing a clear opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame your argument and summary.
Coherence and Cohesion
You maintain a logical progression of ideas, aiding reader comprehension.
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