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The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates data on the proportion of females participating in the
labor
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 force and holding
management
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 positions across five nations:
Australia
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, Egypt, Sri Lanka, Japan, and the United States.
Overall
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,
women
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 represent a substantial portion of the workforce in most countries, with the exception of Egypt.
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, their involvement in managerial
roles
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 is markedly lower in several cases.
Australia
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 and the United States display a relatively balanced gender distribution in
management
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,
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 Sri Lanka and Japan exhibit significant disparities. In
Australia
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, the figures for
women
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 in the
labor
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 force (42%) and
management
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 positions (43%) are closely aligned, reflecting an almost equal gender representation in both sectors.
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, in the United States, 40% of the workforce is female, with a slightly higher percentage of 43% occupying
management
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roles
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. These statistics indicate a comparatively equitable distribution in these two countries.
Conversely
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, a pronounced gap is evident in the remaining nations. In Japan,
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women
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 constitute 49% of the workforce—a figure comparable to
Australia
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 and the United States—only 17% of managerial
roles
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 are held by
women
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. Sri Lanka exhibits a similar imbalance, with
women
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 accounting for 42% of the
labor
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labour
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 force but only 9% of
management
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 positions. In Egypt, the figures are considerably lower, with females representing just 20% of the workforce and an even smaller proportion—10%—in managerial
roles
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words management, australia, women, roles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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