Nowadays the way many people intract with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development.
Recently, technology has played a vital role in altering the way that many
people
communicate with each Use synonyms
other’s
, as it has replaced physical interaction with online communication. Change noun form
other
As a result
of Linking Words
this
, social connections with family and friends were strongly impacted by Linking Words
this
. In my view, I believe that the drawbacks of Linking Words
this
phenomenon outnumbered its benefits as the lack of face-to-face interaction Linking Words
have
affected relationships and led to mental health problems Correct subject-verb agreement
has
to
many individuals.
Change preposition
for
While
technology has made communication among Linking Words
people
faster and easier, Use synonyms
but
it has impacted Correct word choice
apply
the
regular Correct article usage
apply
face to face
communication. Add a hyphen
face-to-face
People
use social media platforms to connect Use synonyms
instead
of visiting each other’s at home. Linking Words
For example
, social networks like Facebook, WhatsApp and Instagram enable Linking Words
people
to talk with each Use synonyms
other’s
at any time during the day without having to reschedule for an outing.
Change noun form
other
Although
online networks should have connected Linking Words
people
easily, Use synonyms
however
, it actually Linking Words
has
disconnected them. The lack of physical interaction has weakened relationships as they have become Correct subject-verb agreement
have
short term
relations, which resulted in many physiological problems Add a hyphen
short-term
to
many individuals. Change preposition
for
For instance
, studies show that many Linking Words
people
in recent years have Use synonyms
mental
health issues like depression because they feel lonely and isolated as they do not have true friendships anymore.
In conclusion, Add a missing verb
had mental
lives
of many Correct article usage
the lives
people
have Use synonyms
changes
because of technology, they used to visit each Change the verb form
changed
others
talk and laugh, but now they connect online by any of the social Change to a singular noun
other
platform
. Change to a plural noun
platforms
Consequently
, many individuals suffer from depression because they are unable to form true friendships anymore.Linking Words
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coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and follows a logical progression of ideas.
task response
Try to support claims with more specific examples or data to enhance the argument.
language
Proofread to identify and correct grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
task response
The essay effectively identifies and explains both positive and negative impacts of technology on relationships.
coherence
An introduction and conclusion are both present and properly frame the discussion, providing a clear thesis and summary.
task response
The argument highlights the mental health consequences of reduced face-to-face interactions, which adds depth to the discussion.
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