in the future people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. all payments may have to be made by card or using phones. do you think this will happen one day? why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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phenomenon made a huge evolution in banking transactions. Using cards and widespread online payments have made me imagine a definite cashless future.

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people

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is the anxiety and nervousness that they may experience with novel changes.

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not have immediate access to a currency and bank account at the moment.

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task achievement

Your essay clearly addresses the prompt and provides a thoughtful perspective on the future of cashless payments, analyzing both why people might not be happy with such a transition and what it might entail.

coherence cohesion

Try to enhance logical connections between sentences to improve the overall flow of your essay. This will help in making your argument more persuasive.

language accuracy

Work on refining your syntax and grammar for greater clarity, such as using definite and indefinite articles more accurately.

coherence cohesion

Your introduction clearly sets the context for the topic and outlines your main points succinctly.

task achievement

The use of specific examples, like mentioning the elderly and tourists, effectively supports your main arguments.

coherence cohesion

Your conclusion succinctly summarizes your thoughts while reinforcing your primary perspective on the issue.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

268 words

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Your opinion

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