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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the variations in the consumption of three kinds of junk food (pizza,
fish
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 and
chips
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, and
hamburgers
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) by young people in Australia over a 25-year period from 1975 to 2000. The data is measured in the number of times these foods were consumed each year. At first glance, it becomes evident that
hamburgers
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 were by far the most popular fast food in 2000,
although
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 pizza
also
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 saw a rise in consumption.
However
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 had the highest values in 1975, it observed some fluctuations before experiencing a rapid decrease in 1985.
Overall
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, the most noticeable trend is the consistent rise of
hamburgers
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 across all categories. In 1975,
fish
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 and
chips
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 had the highest values (100),
while
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 two were significantly lower (under 20). The figures for
fish
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 and
chips
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 decreased and increased in 1980 and 1985, respectively. After 1985, It started to decline drastically
as well as
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 reached a low of nearly 40
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 and became the least consumed junk food in the end.
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,
hamburgers
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 stood at 10 in the first year, it displayed a rapid increase throughout the period and reached its peak in 2000 at 100, becoming the most eaten junk item
at the end
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. Pizza,
on the other hand
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, followed a similar pattern till 1995 and hit a high of approximately 85, and
then
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 it remained unchanged for the next five years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, hamburgers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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