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Band 2.5

Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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more and more people think that children should spend all
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their
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time
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their
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belief
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 unnecessary and may be negative.
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 will give my view.
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whithout thier familiy
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without their family
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also
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 goods reason why it might be beneficial to spend a bit
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time
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with
 their family. on the one hand. the option
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 the first opinion is
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attractive
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 spending
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with
 family is beneficial in some ways.
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. to learn
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situation
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 and some
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secondly
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 teach them how
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 a good person and respect
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. one the other hand there are
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reason
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without
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school
schools
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. and kids of course if they
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will focus on accreditation themselves
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, they can consider
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focusing
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 on themselves. and improve
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 skills .
in
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 to me that they have to balance
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between
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Task response
In the introduction, clearly state both sides of the argument and your opinion. This provides a clear framework for your essay.
Coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your arguments are consistently developed throughout the essay.
Coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to connect ideas between and within paragraphs, ensuring smoother transitions.
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Expand on your ideas with more detailed examples to clarify your points and strengthen your arguments.
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Ensure there is a clear and strong conclusion that summarizes your arguments and clearly states your own view in alignment with the introduction.
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The essay considers both sides of the argument, a crucial aspect of task achievement.
Coherence and cohesion
There's a logical flow from discussing one viewpoint to the other, showing an understanding of structure.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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