Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

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Task response

In the introduction, clearly state both sides of the argument and your opinion. This provides a clear framework for your essay.

Coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your arguments are consistently developed throughout the essay.

Coherence and cohesion

Use more linking words and phrases to connect ideas between and within paragraphs, ensuring smoother transitions.

Task response

Expand on your ideas with more detailed examples to clarify your points and strengthen your arguments.

Task response

Ensure there is a clear and strong conclusion that summarizes your arguments and clearly states your own view in alignment with the introduction.

Task response

The essay considers both sides of the argument, a crucial aspect of task achievement.

Coherence and cohesion

There's a logical flow from discussing one viewpoint to the other, showing an understanding of structure.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

189 words

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Developing countries require internation organizations' help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better

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