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The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 between electrical appliances and the number of hours of housework per week. From 1920 to 2019, every usage of electrical appliances went up. Especially the rate of people who use refrigerators peaked in 1980. Vacuum cleaner had the steadiest growth rate, which is 10% each year and in the year 2000, it has become 100%. But not like them, the rate of people who are using washing machines
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ended up around 75%.
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, the number of hours of housework decreased until 1980 and maintained the same percentage.
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 2000 to 2019, it started to decrease again.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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