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The diagram below illustrates the production of a lead pencil. Zhaina..

The diagram below illustrates the production of a lead pencil. Zhaina..
The diagram demonstrates the
process
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 of producing a lead
pencil
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.It provides a
step by step
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 explanation of how trees are grown over a
14 year
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14-year
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 period, trees are harvested and processed in the form
finished
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pencils
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.The
process
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 begins with the planting of
tress
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trees
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ends
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and ends
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 with the packaging of the finished product. The
process
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 starts with planting
tress
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trees
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, which take 4
month
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 to be replanted and 3 years to be thinned. After that, the
tress
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trees
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 are cut down and prepared the wood for
pencil
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 production. The harvested wood is
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 treated to prevent rotting and cut into thin slats. In the manufacturing stage, grooves are carved into the wooden slats, and the black lead is placed inside these grooves.Another piece of wood is placed on top to create a sandwich, which is
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 pressed and headed to hold the lead in position. After the
pencil
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 shape is formed, the individual
pencils
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 are cut out.The final step
include
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 painting, sharpening and stamping the
pencils
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 to prepare them for packaging.The finished
pencils
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 are
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 placed in boxes for distribution. In conclusion, making a lead
pencil
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 is a long
process
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 that takes more than 14 years, involving growth and production steps to create the final product.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, pencil, pencils with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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