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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. I

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. I
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The table shows
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the percentage
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percentage
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about
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of
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the
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apply
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schools
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 in 2000 and 2009. The table compares the
percent
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 of people who study in different
schools
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 like
speciallst
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special
, grammar,voluntary-controlled,
community
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and community
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schools
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It is clear that
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 the specialist
schools
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, grammar
schools
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 and voluntary-controlled
schools
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 disincreased.
However
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, community
schools
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 increased for many years. The specialist
schools
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shows
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 the smallest percentage of the table. The largest system,
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in community
schools
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Furthermore
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, grammar
schools
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was
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twenty four
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percent
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 in 2000 but in 2009 was 12
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per cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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