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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. A

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. A
The table shows
percent
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per cent
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about
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of
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schools
Change the noun form
school
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 types in four
section
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sections
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. The table compares the four networks in each who go to the species
school
Use synonyms
.
It is clear that
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 the three
falls
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fall
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school
Use synonyms
 systems
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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degreased
Correct your spelling
decreased
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 and each
of
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apply
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increased than the other systems. The community
school
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 is the got up, and
this
Linking Words
school
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 option
having
Wrong verb form
has
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rise
Wrong verb form
risen
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 step by step. But in other
schools
Add a comma
schools,
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 they decrease every year.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • attendance
  • secondary schools
  • types
  • pupils
  • statistics
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • school types
  • comparing
  • percentage change
  • education policy
  • demographics
  • illustrate
  • proportionate change
  • data
  • overview
  • fluctuations
  • analysis
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