Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Few
people
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believe that to avail excellent public services
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as roads and
school
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schools
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, citizens need to
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contribute
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a major portion of
salaries
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their salaries
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as a
tax
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to the
policy makers
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policymakers
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,
while
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others have
opposite
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the opposite
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thought
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thoughts
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as
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that
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high
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a high
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tax
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burden could
be
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have
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a wrong impact on
country
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the country
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. In my opinion,the higher taxation on residents of states is
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a bad thing. On the one hand, high taxes
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is
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are
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collected from the
people
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could help the
goverment
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government
to provide better
infrastracture
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infrastructure
to the local dwellers. To explain it, the authority
have
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good
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a good
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amount of budget and money to develop and
bulild
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build
new roads and educational institutes. To add, they can
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spend on
maintaince
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maintenance
and
reparing
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repair
works
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work
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. As
result
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a result
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, citizens of
country
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the country
a country
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can
exprience
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experience
of
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apply
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commute and
also
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better
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a better
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quality of life that leads to
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the economy
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economy
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economic
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growth of the nation.
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, the
goverment
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government
of India allocating a major budget for
development
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the development
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of highways and expressways. Thereby, the world back
predict
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predicts
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the growth of India by 4.5%.
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, excessive taxation on
worker
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workers
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may
adverserly
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adversely
impact on country's development. If
people
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get less money after paying
great
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a great
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portion salaries as
tax
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,
then
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they have less
laxury
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luxury
to spend freely for daily essential items
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as groceries.
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.
this
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could
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impact
the
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apply
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people
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's
mind
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minds
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as there is
lack
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a lack
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of motivation to work more and
this
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is end-up
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results
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in productivity
issue
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issues
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. In conclusion,
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paying
significant
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a significant
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amout
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amount
amounts
of
tax
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to the
authority
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authorities
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can aid the
goverment
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government
in
such
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way
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a way
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that they can
efficently
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efficiently
able
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apply
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provide good
standard
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standards
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to
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of
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public services, good
develop
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development
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qaulity
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quality
educational places, I believe that taking
major
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a major
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proportion as a
tax
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from
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on
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salaries may leads to production deficit as less motivates to work more and
also
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people
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have less freedom over hard earn money.
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Try to incorporate clear counter-arguments or alternative perspectives more explicitly to show a balanced understanding.
introduction
The introduction sets up the debate well and clearly states the writer's view, which is important for a task like this.
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The writer manages to cover both views of the topic, fulfilling the basic requirement of discussing both sides.
coherence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion of salary
  • Necessary public services
  • Economic growth
  • Quality of life
  • Redistributing wealth
  • Discourage
  • Motivation and productivity
  • Favorable tax conditions
  • Infringement on personal freedom
  • Balanced approach
  • Progressive tax system
  • Economic activity
  • Financial growth
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