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The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the trends and prediction of
population
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 growth of four different
age
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 groups in New Zealand over the
period
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 1950 to 2050.
Overall
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, the proportion of
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age
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 over 65 is the highest throughout the given
period
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. The lowest
population
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 was the
age
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 of 0-14 in 1950,
however
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, the lowest
population
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 will become the
age
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 of 25-37
at the end
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 of
this
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period
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. Looking in detail, the
population
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 of the
age
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 group of over 65 and 36-45 had a similar pattern over the year 1950 to 2050. There were nearly 60% and around 25% of
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population
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the population
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 at the beginning respectively, and
then
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 gradually increased from 1950 to 1990. After the year of 1990, both
age
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 groups'
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population
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populations
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 dropped
down
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apply
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and
then
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 remained in a relatively flat pattern
to
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until
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 the end of the research
period
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. Regarding the
age
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 group of 25-37, it reached a peak at around 25% in 1960 and
then
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 decreased gradually to the lowest point at about 1% in 2050.
Whereas
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, the percentage of
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population
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the population
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 of the
age
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 group 0-14 was in a stable pattern from 1950 to 1990 and
then
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 increased to the highest point at about 20% in 2050.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • notable rise
  • projection
  • stabilization
  • plateauing
  • growth rate
  • population growth
  • timeline
  • trend
  • segment
  • economic conditions
  • migration policies
  • birth rates
  • data series
  • historical
  • forecast
  • intervals
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