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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per person of 11.5 litres.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per person of 11.5 litres.
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The given table illustrates
that
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the
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figures
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 about the daily
cost
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 of water per
person
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 in five different countries.
Overall
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, the higher
daily
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the daily
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cost
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 per
person
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, the more
cost
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 as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
average
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the average
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 daily
wage
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.
In other words
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, there was the highest daily
cost
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 in Tanzania, it was likely to
the
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be the
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 highest
cost
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 as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
average
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the average
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 daily
wage
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. Looking at the graph in more detail, the
figures
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 for both sessions in Tanzania
was
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were
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 observed first order, reaching 6.4 cents and 5.7% each. Following them, the
figures
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 for both sessions in Uganda
was
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were
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 shown second order, reaching 4.1 cents and 3.2% each. It is noticeable that the gap between Pakistan and the UK in daily
cost
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 per
person
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 was seen
small
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as small
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.
In contrast
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, there was
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a significantly
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significantly
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significant
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 gap between
two
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the two
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 countries in
cost
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 as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of average daily
wage
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.
Finally
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, the
figures
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 for both sessions in the US were fifth order. In conclusion,
cost
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 as
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percentage
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a percentage
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 of
average
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the average
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 daily
wage
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 depended on
daily
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the daily
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cost
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 per
person
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figures, cost, person, percentage, wage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial burden
  • socio-economic conditions
  • discrepancies
  • access
  • affordable
  • disparities
  • quality of life
  • efficiency
  • effectiveness
  • infrastructure
  • governance
  • accessibility
  • geographic
  • climatic conditions
  • expenses
  • global efforts
  • sustainable
  • water management
  • international cooperation
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