Recently, the internet is being used to get information on various aspects and to buy Goods. What do you think about advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon.

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SOCIAL MEDIA
USED
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TO FIND INFORMATION ON SEVERAL
PLATFORM
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SOCIAL MEDIA HAVE
ALOT
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A LOT
OF SHOPPING
STORE
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STORES
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WHERE WE HAVE TO BUY EVERYTHING ONLINE . IN MY
OPNION
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OPINION
SOME
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WHERE
ITS
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WORTHFUL
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FOR US
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IN SOME
PLACE
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ITS
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DIGASTER FOR US .
FIRSTLY
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, DISCUSS ABOUT
BENEFIT
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OF
INTERNET
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THE INTERNET
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ACCORDING TO
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ME
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ITS
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GOOD TO
BUYING
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BUY
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ONLINE SHOPPING BECAUSE SOME PEOPLE WHO
DONT
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AFFORD TRANSPORTATION MORE ITS EASY WAY TO GET A THING .
AND
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WE HAVE
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FACE
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SOME
LOSS
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OF
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ONLINE SHOPPING
FOR INSTANCE
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TO BUY ONLINE GOOD THING WE PAY DEBIT CARD OR MASTER CARD WE
DONT
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DO
KNOW THE VALUE OF MONEY BECAUSE WHEN WE
BOUGHT
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BUY
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SOMETHING
PHYSICAL
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PHYSICALLY
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WE PAY MAINLY
THROUGH
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CASH SO WE FEEL THE MONEY VALUE AND
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WE GET ONLY THINGS THAT WE NEED .
SECONDLY
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, I ADMIT THAT TO GET INFORMATION ON SOCIAL MEDIA ITS
TOTTALLY
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TOTALLY
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SAFE
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EVERY EXPERT EASILY FOUND ABOUT YOU AND ITS IMPACT ON YOUR LIFE .
WHILE
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ITS
ALSO
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SOME BENEFIT
FOR INSTANCE
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SOME
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ONE
WHO
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WENT TO ANOTHER PLACE AND
DONT
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DON'T
KNOW THE WAY TO Reach their location . so for them
its
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good for
theem
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them
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also
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some people who search
about
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something in example student find their math notes
simply
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search
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searching
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on
google
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so
that is
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benefit
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disaster
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organization
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clarity
Work on sentence structure and punctuation to enhance clarity. Use transitional phrases to link ideas smoothly.
support
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content
Ensure to fully address both advantages and disadvantages with balanced arguments and solutions.
development
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content
The essay demonstrates an understanding of both positive and negative impacts of internet usage, showing awareness of the topic.
argument
The writer attempts to provide reasoning for both sides of the argument, which shows a grasp of persuasive writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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