“The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.”

“The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.”
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The line graph illustrates the
changing
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changes
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in prices of three elements, which are copper, nickel, and zinc, throughout one year from
January
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to December.
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, there
were
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was
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no
decreasing
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apply
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sharply
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in the prices of
three
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the three
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metals. They
were
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apply
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decreased
down
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from
January
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to May,
thentheir
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then they
went up in July. Looking at the details more closely, it can be seen that the price of nickel elements
fall
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significantly from 6 to -3 between
January
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and July,
then
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increased in July from -3 to 1 in November,
while
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the price of copper
was
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fluctuation over 2014 ,but between June until September was remained stable. On
other
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hand, the data
also
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show that in
January
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, zinc rose sharply from 1 to 3 in February,
then
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fell down to -1 in
period
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a period
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of 4 months. Meanwhile, in October, zinc and nickel
were
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rose dramatically until November, but copper went slightly.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words january with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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