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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of various sources of energy which were produced between 1995 and 2005.

The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of various sources of energy which were produced between 1995 and 2005.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of five different
sources
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 of
energy
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 which were produced in two different years (1995 and 2005).
Overall
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, the production of petrol was the highest in the first
year
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,
while
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 in the second
year
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, it was coal. Meanwhile, the production of
energy
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 from other
sources
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 was the lowest in both years. As we can see, there was an increase in the figure for
energy
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 generated by nuclear and coal,
whereas
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 other
sources
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 and petrol went down. With regards to
energy
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 generated by petrol, it made up 30% in 1995 and
then
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 it decreased to a fifth in 2005.
Similarly
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, other
sources
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 constituted a mere 4.8% in 1995 before falling dramatically to 2.8% in 2005.
On the other hand
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, nuclear power accounted for 7.5% in the first
year
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 after which it rose to 17% in the second
year
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.
Likewise
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,
although
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 the production of
energy
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 from coal was 28.7% in 1995, it became the largest
energy
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 produced after a decade reaching 30.7% in 2005.
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, in the case of gas, it remained constant in both years at 29%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, energy, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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