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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart provides key
informations
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information
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 about the amount of people in four
diffrent
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different
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kind
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kinds
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 of sports (
badminton
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, basketball, tennis and rugby)between 1985-2005.
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, it is clear from the graph that rugby declined,
and
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apply
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tennis increased and
each
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apply
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of
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apply
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baseball and
badminton
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remain
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remained
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kind
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 of the same over the period.
According to
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 what is shown,tennis in the year 1985 was
including
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included
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 150, it increased
slowley
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slowly
 over the
years
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 ,it was nearly about 230.
rugby
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Rugby
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 was the most sport people
go
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went
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 to in the year 1985,
kind
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 of close to 250,it
drop
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dropped
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 over the period to 50 in 2005. In
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terms
tearm
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terms
 of
Badminton
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 it
kind
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 of
remain
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remained
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 the same in all
years
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except
accept
acsept
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except
 1990 it showed a little
decreased
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decrease
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 .in the year 2005
booth
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both
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 of
badminton
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 and
bugby
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rugby
buggy
 was
in
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at
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 the same point,at 50.
for
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For
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 basketball
in
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it
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 included the same
majo
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major
 of citizens in all
years
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, with
small
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a small
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 drop in 1990, nearly70.
in addition
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badminton
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 was the lowest
sport
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sports
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 people
attende
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attended
attend
 to in the first four
years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kind, badminton, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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