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The line graphs show the proportion of the population living in the cities across four different countries in Asia between 1970 and 2020, and expected to 2040, with 10-year intervals.

The line graphs show the proportion of the population living in the cities across four different countries in Asia between 1970 and 2020, and expected to 2040, with 10-year intervals.
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The graph represents the percentage of people living in the Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2040.
Overall
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, all cities demonstrate a notable increase in the population over 2 decades. Most of all,
Malaysia
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 will significantly grow to the highest peak;
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,
Indonesia
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 will
also
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 go up, rising above
Thailand
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 and the
Philipines
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Philippines
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 in 2040. Both
Malaysia
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 and
Indonesia
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 communities will dramatically increase to nearly 50%, reaching their highest peak over approximately 85% and 65%, respectively. From the lowest point,
Indonesia
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 will rocket to second place, leaving other nations, except
Malaysia
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, under itself, in 2010,
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 folk from
Malaysia
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 will take over others even earlier, around 1995.
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 contrasts sharply with
Thailand
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 and the Philippines. the number of the crowd from the Philippines, after a slight growth, will fluctuate.
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,
Thailand
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 will stagnate for over 30 years.
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, in 2020, these two areas will start to
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 rise again.

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