The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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The line graph displays the spending on
books
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in four different countries in Europe over a ten-year period, between 1995 and 2005, indicated
with
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millions
US
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dollars.
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, the expenditure on
books
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in all four European nations increased,
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Germany significantly outnumbered others over the entire period of time. Italy’s figures experienced slightly
fluctuated
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,
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that of
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France rose relatively constant. Interestingly, it plateaued before
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at the end
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in Austria. In 1995, the highest
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books
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sales
was
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80 in Germany and constantly increased to 90 in 1999, before slightly
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and
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its peak at around 95 in 2005.
Italy’s
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ranked
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third at just below 50 in 1995,
continued
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to rise and fall before
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up
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just above 60 which was the lowest rank in 2005. The earnings from
books
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in France began the recorded period with approximately 58 and
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stable inclined year on year to nearly 80 in 2005. Austria’s value was the lowest among all
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three regions just under 30 in 1995, before
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to around 40
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until
2001 and
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at
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over 70 surpassing that of
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Italy in 2005.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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