The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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Two potential locations for the planned supermarket are illustrated in
this
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map. The Location S1 is relatively far away from any other functional areas,
while
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the S2 is located in the
town
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centre. S2
locates
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is located
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in the centre of
the
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apply
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Garlsdon, where two main roads would
across
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be across
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this
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area.
This
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will benefit the people who live in
the
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apply
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Brandon and Cranston, as they can approach the supermarket following the main road.
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, people who are working in the industry areas in
this
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town
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could
also
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easily find
this
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supermarket.
In contrast
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, the location of S1 is relatively remote, which is in the
north west
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northwest
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country side
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countryside
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of the
town
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. Similar to S2, two main roads
also
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across S1 and one of them would go through to Hindon, which is the closest community around Garlsdon.
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, compared with S2, S1 is a bit difficult for residents living
in
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on
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the
south east
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southeast
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side of the
town
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to reach.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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