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Band 1

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowsday
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Newsday
Nowadays
, it is often argued that
employee
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 should have more leisure time on
weekend
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weekends
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 and short
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on
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 work. As far as
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 am concerned, I strongly agree with
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 opinion and think work-life balance is much more
efficency
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efficient
than long-period work , which will reveal in the following paragraph. First of all, I believe that
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, not because of , but because s+v+o
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, v.ing
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, there is a strong benefit between and
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,
advantages
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 of balancing in
worklife
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life
 outweigh the
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 of industrious working in a long-term perspective.
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, I completely believe that is more
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beneficial
 than because it makes balancing and
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 for human
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.

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Ensure you answer the question completely, providing reasons for your stance on a shorter working week and longer weekend.
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Develop the ideas more clearly to cover all aspects of the prompt. Enhance clarity by avoiding unfinished sentences and vague expressions.
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Include specific examples to support your points, which will help in strengthening the argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay. Ensure each paragraph conveys a clear idea that contributes to your overall argument. Complete any unfinished thoughts or sentences to enhance communication.
coherence cohesion
Reinforce connections between ideas through transitional words or phrases to improve the essay's cohesion.
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You have expressed a clear opinion, which is a good starting point for your response.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion indicate the writer's perspective and attempt to summarize the arguments.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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