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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two plans display the developmental changes that happened on the ground floor of a
library
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 in the years 2002 and 2009.
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, the most significant change in the
library
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 is the addition of new computers and the replacement of the fiction
section
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 with a children's area and
tables
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. Four
sections
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 were added
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 the left of the
library
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. The entrance, stairs and the librarian's desk remained the same. Four
sections
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 including fiction, kitchen, economics and law were added to the self-help and history
sections
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 to become six
sections
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 in total. The fiction
section
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 was replaced with
tables
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 and a children's area was added between the table areas. The newspaper and periodicals
section
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 was replaced with the films and DVD
section
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 in 2009. New computers were added near the film
section
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. The small eight
tables
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 which are located in the middle of the ground floor
library
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 were replaced with long
tables
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 which remained in the same place between the six
sections
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 and the films and DVD
section
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.

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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure all changes are clearly and comprehensively described. Additionally, provide more specific examples where possible to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider including a conclusion to summarize key points. Ensure a logical flow of ideas throughout the essay.
task achievement
The essay effectively highlights the main changes observed in the library from 2001 to 2009, showing a clear understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical structure, with changes clearly organized based on specific sections of the library.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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