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The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
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The
line
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 graph gives information about the monetary aid
with
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from
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organisation
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organisations
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 to
improving
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improve
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 nations between 2008 and 2011 . They are
maesured
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measured
 by
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billion
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billions
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dollars
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of dollars
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 .
Overall
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, the graph
lliustrate
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illustrate
illustrates
illustrated
 four types of
organiztion
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organisation
 from A to D .
It is clear that
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 the
figur
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figure
of
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highest
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the highest
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point
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organizaton
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organization
B
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in
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at
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 the
end
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 of
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period
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the period
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while
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,
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apply
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 the figure
of
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the lowset
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lowset
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lowest
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point
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 was
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organization
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Organization
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 D
in
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at
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 the
end
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 of
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period
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the period
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. To being with , in 2008, the organizations of
B
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 and c started
in
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at
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 the same
point
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 but , the
line
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 of
B
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 was
stability
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 until in the year 2009.After that the
organization
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 of
B
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has risen
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rose
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 dramatically to reach in peak
point
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 in 2011
it was
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 around 3
billion
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dollars
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.
Whereas
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, the
line
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 of C has been increased to reach above 1.5
billion
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dollars
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then
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and then
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 recorded under 1.5
billion
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dollars
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. After which it recovered
in
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end
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the end
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 of
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period
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the period
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 to back to 1.5
billion
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dollars
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. The
line
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 of
organization
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 A it growth gradually from the
point
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 0.5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2008 to reach 1
billion
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dollars
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 in the year 2011 .
While
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 the figure
of
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organization
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 D
it was
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apply
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fluctuating
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fluctuated
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 to
made
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make
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 up under 0.5
billion
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dollars
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in
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at
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 the
end
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 of
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period
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the period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, billion, dollars, point, b, end, period, organization with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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