In some countries, more and more local shops are closing down because so many people now shop online. What problems might this cause? What is the best way to deal with this problem?
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costumers
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customers
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sell
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prices
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also find
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coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure by organizing the essay more clearly into paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea with supporting details.
task achievement
Develop each point with clearer, specific examples to strengthen the argument and support your main points.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structures for better clarity and reading flow.
task achievement
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coherence cohesion
The essay provides an introduction and conclusion, attempting to address the entire question.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion