Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these view and share your opinion.

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Some individuals believe that it is beneficial to educate
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and
girls
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in separate
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while
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other people think that
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and
girls
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become advantaged more from going
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schools
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. I personally believe that whilst going to separate
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allow
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allows
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students
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to concentrate more on their
studies
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because there is no possibility of being attracted by their opposite gendered peers, studying in the same
schools
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is actually beneficial for both
boys
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and
girls
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because they learn to
respect
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and understand each other. If
boys
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and
girls
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study in separate
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, they can concentrate more on their
studies
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because they do not become attracted to their peers of
opposite
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gender.
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enhances their
learnings
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and improves their academic performance.
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, in Bangladesh, the passing rate and
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academic performance of one-gender
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are more higher than
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in mixed
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schools
because
boys
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and
girls
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in separate
schools
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can provide full attention to their
studies
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.
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, I personally think that if
boys
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and
girls
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go to separate
schools
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, they cannot learn to
respect
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their opposite
genders
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. Those
boys
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and
girls
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, who study in mixed
schools
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, learn to
respect
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and understand their opposite
genders
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. They study, communicate and share their learnings with their
opposite gendered
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peers, which
assist
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assists
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them
to communicate
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in communicating
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easily with their colleagues when they become adults. They can easily develop professional relationships and effective communication skills with opposite
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, which
help
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helps
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them in their professional careers.
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, in India, some male employees from one multinational company once stated that coeducation really facilitates them to build professional and respectful relationships with their female colleagues.
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, I believe that coeducation is beneficial for future careers. In conclusion,
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going to separate
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allows
students
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to concentrate more on their
studies
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, going to mixed school is more useful for
students
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, because it helps
students
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to
respect
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and build professional relationships with their opposite
genders
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.
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coherence cohesion
Try to maintain consistency in argument throughout the essay to enhance coherence. This ensures the reader follows your train of thought smoothly across paragraphs.
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Continue to ensure clarity in argumentation by clearly delineating opposing viewpoints and your position.
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Enhance your examples by providing more specific and varied instances that support both perspectives to further illustrate your points.
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You provided a good balance in discussing both perspectives and supported them with examples.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame your essay.
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You offered thoughtful insights into the advantages of both single-gender and mixed-gender education.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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