The table below shows the world's ten most expensive countries for petrol along with other financial information. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph compares the ten
producer's
of fuel based on the three components Change noun form
producers
between
- disposable Change preposition
apply
income
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in
average, the mean of fuel expenditure, and the percentage Change preposition
on
income
of petrol Use synonyms
spend
. Wrong verb form
spent
Overall
, Norway earned the highest Linking Words
revenue
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as well as
had Linking Words
biggest
expenses Correct article usage
the biggest
in
their products. Change preposition
for
On the other hand
, Eriteria acquired Linking Words
small
amount of Add an article
a small
income
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whereas
Belgium was the least Linking Words
countries
Fix the agreement mistake
country
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
spend
the expenses.
First and foremost, Norway is the highest Wrong verb form
spent
producers
in disposable but they are the least Fix the agreement mistake
producer
regions
who get monthly Fix the agreement mistake
region
income
spent Use synonyms
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
accounted
Wrong verb form
accounting
of
7.4%. Meanwhile, Eritrea had Change preposition
for
small
contribution in generating Correct article usage
a small
income
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thus
they had Linking Words
biggest
monthly Correct article usage
the biggest
revenue
spent on fuel totalling 61.10%.
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Furthermore
, Denmark, Sweden, Linking Words
Belgium
obtained money in the range of $ 3,100 - $ 3550 Correct word choice
and Belgium
then
the percentages Linking Words
Use synonyms
income
had Change preposition
of income
range
from 7.70% to 8.70%. Change the verb form
ranged
This
is followed by Linking Words
Britan
and Holland who Correct your spelling
Britain
are
received Unnecessary verb
apply
revenue
of Use synonyms
non-resusable
by $ 2681.57 and $ 2880.98, respectively. Correct your spelling
non-reusable
Moreover
, Italy and Greece earned Linking Words
revenue
of $ 1,832 and $ 1,112 Use synonyms
while
Turkey obtained Linking Words
an
half Change the article
a
income
from Italy. Use synonyms
Lastly
, Norway and Turkey have nearly identical expenses of $ 319.85 and $ 315.96, substantially. Others had expenditures below $ 290.Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, revenue with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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