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A friend of yours has always admired your car. You have now decided to sell it. Write a letter to your friend to ask if he is interested in buying your car. In your letter, * explain why you are selling your car * describe the good points and any bad points about your car * suggest the friend visits you to see and drive your car You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Tim,

#friend #car #points #visits #drive #addresses #tim
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Dear Tim, Hello dude, how are you? I hope you’re fine. I’m writing
this
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 letter to ask
to
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you about your interest
toward
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in
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 my
car
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. I want to ask whether you still like my
car
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 or not because I will offer to sell my
car
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 to you. I
want
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 explain some advantages and disadvantages
from
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of
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 my
car
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. The patrol of my
car
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 is economical and affordable. You don’t need to spend a lot of money and you can save your money
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 other necessities.
This
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car
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 is
also
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colorful
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. You can change your
car
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’s
color
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 to other
colors
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colours
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. Meanwhile,
this
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car
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 is
an
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 trouble. You must always check
up
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the condition of the
car
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. I will
provide
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advice
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to
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you to come
in
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 my home next week to see the condition of my
car
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. You can try to drive
this
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car
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 as well if you come here. Yours sincerely, Akbar Surya.
Submitted by akbarsurya264 on

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coherence cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point or idea.
task achievement
Elaborate more on why you are selling the car to give a fuller response.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well done and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
You have included relevant details about the car's advantages and disadvantages.
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