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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the various
of
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films
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 produced by five nations in three years.
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, it is clear from the chart that the
highest
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most
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film
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films
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 produced by
sate
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 A.
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in
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 contrast,
the
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stae
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state
of
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C made
lowest
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the lowest
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 number of
films
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than
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 over four nations. still state A was the highest in film produced. in
2007and
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2007 and
 2008
had
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produced
films
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were
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in
country
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 A with around 85
films
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 per year, in 2009 there was
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a slightly
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slightly
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 decrease to 80
films
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.
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,
country
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 B began with 50
films
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in
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 2007 to 2008
then
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 there was a significant
increased
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 in 2009
around
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to around
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 70
films
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.
while
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 state b gradually
rise
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 with 20
films
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.
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,
country
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 E
was lest
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 produced approximately 11
films
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 in 2007,
while
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country
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 D fluctuated in
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films
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 production between all periods.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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